Christmas Present Snippet #1

Posted: December 25th, 2011 under snippet.
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A Christmas present snippet that is not a spoiler for Echoes of Betrayal, though it was originally intended to be part of that book…but grew out of balance.     It actually “happened”  in Kings of the North,  during the early part of the Pargunese attack on Lyonya.   You will meet Sergeant Vardan in Echoes, a few chapters in…but her viewpoint of what she and her patrol had gone through isn’t given there. This is from her backstory, and not found anywhere but here.

“Holy Falk, Gird, and Camwyn,” Linnar Vardan muttered, shivering where she crouched in a ditch, icy water up to her neck, watching the strange fire race toward her.  She had never seen anything like it, the purple-white glare tree-tall, as intense as the hottest fires smiths made.  She was going to die–they all would–no wet ditch could protect them from something like this.

It burned like no mortal fire, moving as if it had a purpose, an intent behind it.  Waves of heat reached out ahead of it, smelling more like a forge-fire than ordinary burning trees.  It sped nearer; Vardan yelled “Down!” at the patrol, threw her head back, under the water and held her breath.  It would not be enough; she would die, but–

Violet-white fire flowed over the ditch; for the instant before the water turned to steam and obscured vision, Vardan saw what no mortal had ever seen, the underside of a dragonlet, the fire-colored structures that would be, if the dragonlet survived, breastbone, ribs, heart and lungs and limbs.  And she saw the mad eyes, alight with glee.  Instinctively, she rolled over, burrowing face-down in the water; she felt heat on her back and legs, and then searing pain, and then cold again as the light passed with the fire.

Desperate for air, she raised her head.  All around, but the ditch they lay in, was ash–not a stump, not a branch, but a lane of ash, blowing south on the bitter north wind, lit by the fire that still burned on toward the south.  She heaved himself up, surprised to be alive, and heard around her others doing the same–coughing out the muddy water, grunting in pain.

“What was that?”  Tarvol asked.

“Sergeant?”

“I’m here.  I’m fine.”  Vardan said.  She didn’t feel fine, but right now alive was fine, by definition.  “Thank the gods.” Her back felt scorched, but when she reached back over his shoulder, her fingers met wet leather and shreds of wool, not bare burnt flesh.  “All right,” she said, hearing her voice regain its accustomed timbre.  “Who’s with me?”

One by one, they gave their names, clambered out of the ditch, wet, cold, and shaken, but alive.  Except for the four who weren’t…who hadn’t gone all the way under the water.

10 Comments »

  • Comment by B Ross Ashley — December 25, 2011 @ 11:14 pm

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    Lucky for her and her patrol that the dragonlet was in a hurry. Zoom!


  • Comment by Wickersham's Conscience — December 25, 2011 @ 11:18 pm

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    Very nice. These snippets that don’t make the novel need to be collected somewhere. They re too good and too vivid to go to waste.


  • Comment by elizabeth — December 25, 2011 @ 11:27 pm

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    Dragonlets at that stage are not hunters…zoom-zoom is their joy. Heedless, nearly mindless, they burn because it’s their nature. Had dragons not limited their reproduction, dragonlets would have burnt the world to a crisp…but wisdom being characteristic of the adult form, when the elves pointed out the problem, the dragons responded as best they could. However, in the right circumstances they cannot help laying eggs.


  • Comment by Kerry aka Trouble — December 25, 2011 @ 11:45 pm

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    Thank you for the lovely Christmas present.


  • Comment by AJLR — December 26, 2011 @ 4:26 am

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    That was great, Elizabeth, thank you. 🙂


  • Comment by Alessio — December 26, 2011 @ 5:29 am

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    Whoa ! Great present, I feel like I was there 🙂


  • Comment by Rolv Olsen — December 26, 2011 @ 6:09 am

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    Thanks a lot for this excellent Christmas present!
    Wishing )belatedly) you and your family a blessed Christmas and a happy new year.
    Greetings from the Norwegian inland. Snow still covers the ground, the storm has passed, the temperature is slightly above zero, and I’m free until Thursday.
    Rolv


  • Comment by Jenn — December 26, 2011 @ 7:34 am

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    Elizabeth, I love your “deleted scene” snippets and I am in complete agreement with Wickersham’s conscience that eventually they need to be collect somewhere.

    Rolv, you have no idea how envious I am right now. It is a brown dead tree Chirstmas here. I miss the snow and the cold.


  • Comment by Sam Barnett-Cormack — December 26, 2011 @ 10:02 am

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    I also love these deleted scene snippets, but I must ask – did Vardan’s gender change during editing? The occasional male pronoun seems to have slipped through.

    Love the (teeny, tiny) bit more detail about dragonlets, though!


  • Comment by John Hicks — December 26, 2011 @ 7:44 pm

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    I agree. These snippets make the book all the more desirable and worth the wait. Now – how will they stop living fire?
    Happy New Year to all.


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