Oct 05
Finished, Sort Of
Posted: under Editing, Revisions, snippet, the writing life.
Tags: characters, progress report, revision, the writing life October 5th, 2022
NewBook is now complete, where complete means the story makes sense end to end, the plot and subplots are correctly articulated (in the sense of how a skeleton is articulated), there are causes for effects, and effects from causes, and the motivations of POV characters, in particular are shown through behavior, not just chit-chat. Though frankly I think any female person will know *exactly* why Gwenno was bored with the Royal Guard.
It is a proper Paksworld book in size (a bit under 170,000 words) and geographic scope (smaller than some, but covering locations from northern Tsaia, in Arcolin’s domain to well south and west of Valdaire in Aarenis.) Chronologically it’s a spring/summer/fall book, even though there’s a blizzard in it. It’s an *early* blizzard and melts back into a cold nasty wet period. The gap between this book and the last previous Paksworld book is about 5 years, so the page who woke up, ran upstairs when everyone else was spelled, and pulled the non-working rope that wakes the Bells of Verella only in real disasters ….is now a late teenager and considered a young man. The prince with no memory is 20 or 21. An 18 year old squire of Duke Verrakai is 23. And so on, including the people who were hale and healthy five years ago and now…aren’t. Some of them.
It also has horses, swords, spears, lances, thieves (not nice ones), brigands (ditto), pirates (ditto) , bad relatives, good relatives, an overprotected little boy who isn’t that little or shouldn’t be, a birth, some deaths, and–because it involves the Matter of Horngard–Dragon. Several assumptions about eldest girls in a family. But also politics, economics, history, psychology, and such things. Oh, and a song. Sung in an ordinary way and people who also make weird scary noises some other way.
Someone on a Twitter writing group asked people who were writing things “What is your book about?” and I always draw a blank on that because I think my books (and most books) are about more than one thing, and different readers will fix on one or more of the possibilities. But this book–still untitled, though its “barn name” is Horngard, name of the place in which a lot of important things happen–is a story about friendships as people grow up, trauma, memory, honor, personality, politics (et al) from the above list, and so on. The “lead” characters are two boys (in the Paladin’s Legacy books) who became friends, were separated by violence, and their meeting again 5 years later. One has lost all memory of his past due to a traumatic brain injury. The other temporarily loses the memory of having seen his friend again, for the first time in five years because someone else thinks it’s the wrong time for them to be together again. Now the boys are men.
The loss of memory, whether temporary or permanent, has profound effects on them. It interferes with “agency”–that capacity to make things happen, to not be just an object swept along, but to make decisions that work, that move other objects. If you do not know–if you have no story of–your past, it’s a mental amputation of the information most of us use to make decisions and act from. I remember the first time I was lifted up to sit on a horse; I remember how wonderful it was to be up there, able to see so far, to not be blocked in by the legs of older children and adults. That memory starts the chain of my understanding of how I feel about horses. I remember being in an open boat out in the Gulf of Mexico and peering over the side into the green depths…seeing something large rising out of the dimness far below and come up closer, closer, and reveal a mouthful of very sharp teeth. That memory starts the chain of my understanding my relationship to deep water. Horses are wonderful, they’re freedom, they’re lifting me out of limitations. Deep water is scary, dangerous, limiting me to less vision, less freedom, less opportunity. These are not “facts” about horses or deep water, but the memories are at the roots of my attitudes, my deepest feelings.
Soo…what about a snippet, then? And a test on it?
Here are the words of a song (translated into English because I write in English) which can be sung to the tune of one of my favorite songs. The song itself was not, originally, English. Can you figure out from reading the words what the music is? (Don’t go looking over in the Universes blog because it’s listed there.) These words appear in this book (unless an editor rules them out) and I hope to write some music to sing it to *other* than the one I know.
Dragonkin we stand before you
Dragon’s iron wings fly o’er you
Dragon’s iron teeth will score you
We will stand for all
Though we tire, though we hunger
Though we grow not any younger
We will stand as stone in thunder
All will stand for all
Men of Horngard ready
We will all stand steady
Taste the iron of our spears
Your swords will never wake our fears
Our hearts lighten, our eyes brighten
Blood or death, they do not frighten
We of Horngard, Dragon’s kin,we!
Never will we yield.
If you do catch on quickly, just answer with “Got it” or something like, until others have a chance to answer.
I can’t find on YouTube the version I like of the original, which was a capella, not over-enhanced with orchestra or even piano accompaniment. It doesn’t NEED that. It does need a good stout choir.